My Poem

[elcharrom]

I finally did a poem yall, it was for a grade but still, I poured my heart into it, so how is it? Its bout being gay and some of the struggles I went through, and I think alot of us go through as we grow up




I am one among many, many among one
Each one within me fighting with the other
This is right, no that's right, who cares, who knows
Muted turmoil, murmured battles, a whispered war
No one ever knew, no one ever suspected

I am an embarrassment to some, a demon to others, a supposed hellbound-abomination, a fear to mothers.

I am a testament to God's true love, to Jesus' sacrifice, a testament to myself

I am human, sees breathes, tastes, feels, hopes, hopes, dreams

I am alive, why? Why do I exist? There is a purpose for me, there is a happy ending for me as well.

I am taboo, awkwardness, they follow my mentioning, a cocktail of emotion sipped, chilled

I am looking for my happinness, where is it? Is it among the bodies in the crowd? Among the bodies in the heavens?

I am a feather shoved into a hurricane, swept here, swept there, knowing there's a floor, not knowing how to get there

I am still finding myself, searching, scouring my inner ruins

I am finding it hard to find me, hard to locate my peace, after all I am one among many, many among one

[u-dog]

I found your poem very beautiful, very articulate and expressive. It moved me very much. I liked the images ... especially the feather in the hurricane. I have felt that way many times throughout my life. Your pain is there but also your faith and your confidence in the love of God. I loved (though it hurts me) the contrast between how SOME others see you (abomination, demon, embarrassment) and how you see yourself (and how WE see you! :love:) as the beloved of Jesus.

Keep writing ... even when there is no grade. You have a powerful and expressive voice, let the world hear it as much as possible. don't allow hate to silence you!

BTW ... what did you get on it? do you know yet?

Dave

[Alecto]

I REALLY loved some of the images...particularly "a cocktail of emotions...".

[elcharrom]

I found your poem very beautiful, very articulate and expressive. It moved me very much. I liked the images ... especially the feather in the hurricane. I have felt that way many times throughout my life. Your pain is there but also your faith and your confidence in the love of God. I loved (though it hurts me) the contrast between how SOME others see you (abomination, demon, embarrassment) and how you see yourself (and how WE see you! :love:) as the beloved of Jesus.

Keep writing ... even when there is no grade. You have a powerful and expressive voice, let the world hear it as much as possible. don't allow hate to silence you!

BTW ... what did you get on it? do you know yet?

Dave

I dont know wat I got on it yet, but reading what you had to say I dont think I have to worry much, and by the way thanks!!! :D I wasnt intentionally doing any of that, but I guess that's what comes out when you write from the heart, and yea Im liking writing more and more so I might have more coming :D

[Zerbie]

You have are a LOT of creative images and contrasts. Some really unique stuff! Very good!!!!!!

:tup::award::applause:

[dsdrane]

Beautiful, Jorge.

Keep it coming....:cool:

[sailaway58]

Very nice, very bold

[Dash]

I like it!!!

...there is a happy ending for me as well.

I don't know why, but this simple little phrase gives me so much joy!!:love:

I am still finding myself, searching, scouring my inner ruins

Tasty!!!

More please!:D

[Jennifer5]

Wonderful! A+ :love:

[elcharrom]

ooo forgot about this, thx yall :D

[dsdrane]

harrumph 'n' stuff...!?

You forgot!?

Equeeze me!?!?

Yo...not acceptible, dude. Make with the poetry, yo!

Are you for reals, or what?

*tapping my foot*

[elcharrom]

harrumph 'n' stuff...!?

You forgot!?

Equeeze me!?!?

Yo...not acceptible, dude. Make with the poetry, yo!

Are you for reals, or what?

*tapping my foot*

HAHA

yea foreal I forgot, I dont even think the teacher graded it haha I want my A!!! :mad: harumph!!! I need it :'(

[squirt07]

thanks for the poem. i totally appreciate it.