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Old 10-12-2006, 09:28 AM
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Smile Political Haiku

Five seven five style
Ancient Japanese poem
Can you do Haiku?

Making fun of Bush
Laughing at religious right
Having a Gay time

The Rules of haiku are simple,
Three sentences, broken into syllables
First five, then seven, then five.
(no this one is not a haiku)

Who here can do it.
Will you step up to the plate?
just don't break the rules.

Example
Bush Che-ney Rums-feld
design-ers of death and war
can the world sur-vive?
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Old 10-13-2006, 12:31 AM
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....good one, every now and then I can do haiku, but my mind has gone blank.... and i never really thought of doing political haiku...it always felt like an art to me, and some how I never feel that way about politics.
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Old 10-13-2006, 11:25 AM
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Default Haiku hard...

In a half-lit world
They fear our nation's twilight.
In me it's morning.
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Old 10-14-2006, 04:15 AM
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In a half-lit world
They fear our nation's twilight.
In me it's morning.
I don’t know why, but that last line demanded an immediate and unexpected chortle of me with an ever so slightly noticeable tinge of sadness.
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Old 10-14-2006, 09:50 AM
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Nice Haiku dash,

Just to remind you the rules of haiku,
It is a short japanese poem three sentences
broken into syllables of 5 for the first line, 7 for the second line and 5 for the last line.
For example
full of life and song
we march in a grand par-ade
I love be-ing Gay

Those with a sharp tongue,
who speak hate-ful lies, take care
not to cut your throat
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Old 10-14-2006, 10:48 AM
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Okay...this one's political satire...

I have come for all
Mighty destroyer of worlds
Homosexual

...cuz you know...that's kinda how they see us.
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Old 10-14-2006, 02:12 PM
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Heheh - Dash, I like your first one better.

That last line made me do a little *gasp* of happy happies.

I really love mornings. And I loved your poem.
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Old 10-14-2006, 04:12 PM
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Political Ones Come Later. It seems to me, though, that the last line should have a slight, subtle change in focus from the first two, and the meter of the the lines should be slightly stilted. (Or is that just how they somehow translate?)

Hai Ku, Here, Would Do
Ah, But When There Is Much Drink
Naught Comes, But Low-ku

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AfricanAmerican
Many Syllables

Hey, I sincerly hope that I have not offended anyone of color, but it IS a very bulky word.

I'm feeling goofy today. Hey, these things are better than Limerics. Subtle, even.

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